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<Topic> The
pictures below show the changes that took place at Laguna Beach from 1950 to
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The given In general, we can evidently see that the
beach had become a great deal more accessible with some added and expanded facilities.
In 1950, a few beach huts were located at the center
of the beach. Sand dunes and woodland were situated on the west side and east
side accordingly. A narrow track on the northeast was connected to the beach
huts alongside the woodland, and it was the only way to access
One of the most noticeable changes from 1950
to 1970 was the expanded accommodation at the center of the beach. It was revamped
as villas by putting sand dunes towards the north. Hence, the sand dunes area was
shrunk, whereas the narrow track was refurbished as a paved two lanes road.
Another significant change was a caravan park after removing all woods on the former
woodland.
In 1990, although sand dunes disappeared, the
area has transformed into Landscaped Gardens. On the right side of the gardens,
villas which were at the center of the beach were
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오랜만에 MAP 문제를 풀어보고 싶었는데 생각보다 질이 좋은 지도가 없었습니다.
부족하지만 첨삭 부탁드립니다.
감사합니다.
총평: 글은 잘 써주셨으니까 여기에 대한 설명은 패스하고, 잠시 다른 말씀을 드리자면...task2는 그래도 인터넷에 돌아다니는 친구들로 풀어도 괜찮은 반면에, task1의 경우 인터넷에 돌아다니는 출처없는 애들은 안 건드리는 걸 추천드리긴 합니다. 그 중 상당수는 아이엘츠나 통계에 대해 제대로 모르는 사람들이 그냥 양산형으로 대충 만든 경우가 많기 때문이죠. 고로 task1은 C교재나 저희 교재 등, 검증된 책에 한해서만 다뤄주시고, 나머지는 그냥 모범답안 분석하는데에 쓰시는 게 좋습니다.
수고하셨습니다 :)