Some people believe that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many countries import and export everything easily in modern society so some countries do not need to produce food or grocery for their citizens. Instead, they focus on other things which they can produce and export to other countries. However, import is affected by various situations so it always has risks. I agree with the opinion/stance/argument 등 취향껏 that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. This essay will provide the reasons.
First of all, most countries contact each other
regularly and discuss about tax of import and export. Import can be affected by
these discussions. Also, if (if가 들어가면 비문이 되어버립니다. 현 문장을 한국어로만 바꿔보셔도 금방 감을 잡으실 거에요.) the relationship between two countries have an
influence on import. Thus, it is dangerous to depend on other countries, not
producing food themselves. As preparation, the government has have to encourage their citizens to produce food themselves.
On the other hand Furthermore, producing food themselves
can be helpful for economy. Each regions have different climate. It means that
groceries or fruits that each nation can cultivate are different so they can
make up their own diets. Also, if they develop specific high-quality food in their own nation, they can make profits by exporting
remained things. As a result, nations can feed their population by producing
food they can cultivate in their own land and make money by exporting.
In conclusion,
countries should produce food themselves to feed their citizens and do not have
to rely on other countries, importing food. By Through producing food by themselves, it
can prevent risks of import from the relationships of countries and develop the
economy by exporting specific food that only they can produce.
총평: (7/6/6/7) 6.5
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