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There is controversy over the issue of whether music is a good way
to bring people of different cultures and ages together. Although some people
might say that music is not a proper method to make people of different
cultures and ages together, I firmly believe that music is one of the excellent
ways of bringing different people together (벌써 세 번이나 쓰이고 있습니다.).
First of all, when people from different
cultures and ages share the same music, they could form the feeling of
belonging in a same group. Although they have differences, the music they are
singing and listening to would be a common thing for them. According to a
survey on people from many different countries and of different ages, after
singing and listening to the same music for an hour, the majority of people
felt them as a group, while they were indifferent to each other before sharing
the same music. (이렇게 쓰는 건 아무 의미 없습니다. 시간+분량만 낭비하게 되는데, 자세한 건 밑에서 설명드릴게요.
In
addition, the music is one of the effective methods to bring different people
together, as it is the thing that people could enjoy. Music is the thing that
has less probability of conflicts between many different people. For example,
when it comes to discussing problematic social issues, people would have many
different opinions based on their own perspectives related to their culture or
own interest, even leading to the conflicts between people. In contrast,
although there might be some differences (얘도 너무 많이 쓰이고 있습니다.) depending on personal preferences,
there are less reasons for people to have conflicts in terms of music. This
shows that music is the one that people can enjoy together, which has less
possibility of conflicts. (참고로 지금 본론 두 문단은 다시 쓰셔야 한는데, 이에 대해서는 밑에서 말씀드리겠습니다.)
In
conclusion, whether music can be being a good way to bring different people together is a
contentious topic because there are different opinions that support and oppose
to the basic idea. However, I firmly believe that music is one of the best ways
to make people of different cultures and ages together. |