<Topic> You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. | |||
These days, there is mixture of
nationalities with globalization worldwide. In addition, there are some
arguments whether First of all, the mixture of
nationalities makes big differences between people. With the addition of Other people can say that various views
make the country develop in many aspects. However, it is inefficient
sometimes. For instance, South Korea has developed quickly 60 years ago. At that
time, most of the population was consisted of Koreans In conclusion, I do not agree with the
argument that a country is developed more quickly with globalization of
population. With mixture of cultures and nationalities, the government would have to search more information and opinions whenever they make important decisions. However,
the globalization is a natural thing as transportation and media are enhanced. | |||
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