The diagram gives information concerning all the steps of recycling newspapers, and it divides this process into a total of seven steps (얘는 Overall 부분에 들어가는 게 맞긴 합니다.). Overall, it is easily observed that recycling the newspapers require various processes like using machineries and chemicals. (여러 개의 단계가 있다~라고 쓰는 건 크게 의미가 없고, 대신 1번 단계와 마지막 단계를 begins with~~~의 구조로 작성해주시면 돼요.)
To begin with, the newspapers that no longer use are gathered, and it is delivered to sorting and bailing facilities. After this, the newspapers and water are fused to make a muddy mixture called ‘slurry’, and to eliminate manifold contaminants such as glue, staples, metals that are made at previous step utilizes two methods like screening and whitening. (이 문장은 비문임은 확실하므로 일단 의도하신 바에 대해 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.)
After these processes have
been complete, press machine squeeze the slurries to press out water and makes
a familiar form of paper. After the pressing process, the papers are sent travel to a
cutter machine to cut the papers into proper size. Lastly, the papers that are
finished with the cutting process are baled to sell to the public, and if people throw
it away into recycle bins, these processes begin the same process again.
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총평: (6/7/6/6) 6.5
다이어그램 유형의 Overview를 잡을 때에는, 단계의 갯수와 시작, 끝 단계를 언급해주신다고 보면 됩니다. 그리고 중간에 저 표시해드린 문장이 꼬인 이유는 다름이 아니라 문장이 너무 길어졌기 때문입니다.고로 항상 문장을 최대한 짧게 끊어갈 수 있도록 연습해주세요~
수고하셨습니다 :)