The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
These days, more and more countries have shown interest interested in the nuclear weapons so, it is becoming one of the serious issues worldwide.
According to some people, they argue that the advantages are greater than the
drawbacks such as in the side of price and environmental pollution. Although
there are benefits like they said, I strongly disagree with this view and I
will explain the reasons below which can support my opinion.
To begin with, the biggest disadvantage in
nuclear weapons is definitely safety. In order to generate the type of weapons, it
requires uranium which emit radioactivity when they are collapsed. It means that
they are the most dangerous weapon in the process of production, management and
usage based on the accidents of radiation exposure that have occurred so far.
For example, in 1945, during the Second World War, the United States dropped
atomic bombs on the cities of Hiroshima and Nagasaki in Japan. Because of this
accident, the two cities were polluted by radioactivity and fire broke out, so
around up to 600,000 people were at least injured, or worse, died had damaged (사람에게 damage를 쓰지는 않습니다.).
Another point to consider is that nuclear
weapons are able to bring about the destruction of ecological system. The environment Environment
also is going to be exposed to the worst situation such as conflagration, water
pollution, air pollution and soil pollution by working them. It will cause the
losing natural habitat of wild animal and diverse plant species and then eventually,
the ecosystem will be broken or extinct. The result can be lasted for a long time
even for the next generation and also takes a lot of time and effort to restore.
Thus, a nuclear weapon which is made of
dangerous materials is possible to affect severe disaster like damage of human
life, animals and plants.
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총평: (6/7/6/7) 6.5
사실 6점대 혹은 그 이하의 점수대에서 중요하지는 않지만, 7.0 이상에서는 중요합니다. 논제는 nuclear 'technology'의 장단점을 요구하고 있지, nuclear 'weapon' 의 장단점이 아닙니다. (참고로 전자가 후자를 포괄하는 개념입니다.) 고로 결론에서도 nuclear weapon이라고 써서는 안 됩니다. 핵무기를 하나의 예시로 드는 건 가능하지만, 그걸 아예 글의 주제로 확대해석해서는 안돼요.
수고하셨습니다 :)