In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast food. This has a negative impact on families, individuals and society.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is no doubt that the number of people who consume fast
food has increased. The problem of this is that traditional foods are being replaced
by junk foods. With regards to this situation, some people say that this can lead
to a negative impact on not only human beings but also society. I strongly agree
with that because we can easily find the result of a bad diet.
Even though many fast food restaurants make a lot of new
menus that contain contained less fats and calories, it is obvious that eating junk
foods often leads to various serious diseases, such as obesity, diabetes. Statistically, in the country that consumes a lot of fast foods, the number rate of people who are obese have
obesity is significantly high compared to other countries. These problems of diseases
can affect the life expectancy. Of course, as technology advances, so did the
medical technology. However, we cannot overlook the diseases that can be caused led by
consuming fast food often.
Replacing traditional foods Traditional foods being replaced by fast food can affect not only
individuals but also economy. If the life span is lower than it used to be, the number
of people who engaged in economic activities would be decreased. Then, it leads
to the problem of the labor market. Not only this, as traditional foods are
replaced, the identity of cultural foods can be ruined. (이거 관련해서 1~2줄만 더 써주세요! 2분 남았으니까 충분히 쓰실 수 있을 겁니다.)
To conclude, even though the taste of fast foods is better
than traditional foods, we have to keep in mind about our health healthy and the
economic impact. Therefore, in for these reasons, I strongly agree with statement
that the fast food has a negative impact on our society.
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본론1에서처럼 통계를 들 때, 99.9999%는 number가 아닌 rate, 즉 비율로 간다고 보시면 됩니다. 기본적으로 각 나라의 인구 격차가 매우 큰 상황에서 number를 따지는 건 의미가 없어요. 통계의 함정을 보여주는 대표적인 사례가 될 뿐입니다.
수고하셨습니다 :)