Drug abuse is an increasing problem in modern times.
Discuss some reasons behind this and suggest ways it can be hindered.
Today, the misusage of the drug becomes worse and is rising as one of the most top critical matters in our society. While this is a serious issue, it can be dealt with an aggressive policy of the government.
One of the main backgrounds on drug abuse is the form of current society where we live. Let's get back to our born. (이런 류의 표현은 구어라서 별로 좋지는 않은데, 홀란드님의 경우 어차피 6.5만 필요하시며, 다른데에서 점수 다 벌어가시기 때문에 그냥 두겠습니다.) Since that moment, our life seems like a row of endless competition and it leads people to get stressful. The world gets more competitive competing in which lots of people face with failures. For those people who were in deep depression mentally, it would be really hard to find a release to go through and can easily fall be easily fell in drug abuse. We tend to neglect those people, even ourselves as well. In fact, the research has shown that a big stake of modern human-being is suffering a mental disease while even they do not even know if they have such a problem.
However, there are solutions to this problem of drug abuse. One of the ways to deal with mental health is an aggressive intervention of the government. A majority of drug users can not afford to live a standard livelihood, not to mention the fact that they are jobless. In this regard, they should be allowed with an opportunity to get over it. For example, if they get a chance for employment, they might be cheerful again and set a goal for a second life. It can also be a motivation to whom are still relying on drugs.
To sum up, it is clear that it (문단에 처음 등장하는 대상이 대명사로 쓰여서는 안 됩니다.) is affecting badly across the world. Tough, this This issue cannot be neglected anymore and can be resolved with the government's proper policy implementation.
1. 목표 : 6.5
2. 날짜 : 11월 말
3. 50분/281자/도움 x
4. 기타 : 몇번 쓰다보니 어떻게 써야할지 감이 쬐~~끔씩 오긴하는거 같은데..집중하다보면 시간이 오래걸리네요.. 공부해보니 일단 문제의 주제확인하고 글의 가닥을 처음에 제대로 잡는게 중요하다고 느껴집니다~~
총평: (6/7/7/6) 6.5
홀란드님의 경우 지금 당장 시험을 보면 6.5를 받을 수 있냐에 대해서는 제가 100% 확답을 드리지는 못하겠지만, 11월 말까지 꾸준히 공부하시면, 그 경우에는 100% 받으실 수 있을 겁니다. 시간 문제 등이 없다는 전제 하에요.
제가 1차 과제를 내드릴테니까, 11월 초까지 그 어떠한 Task2이든 다 45분 내에 쓸 수 있게 연습해오세요!
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