It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide university places for a high proportion of young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With increased educational opportunities
for young people, some argue extents that the college should be operated and managed
by a nation whereas others believe that is not a realistic and productive way.
I personally think that providing academic places for young generation
with national resources can be effective way of mitigating issues such as
skyrocketed tuition fee and stressful academic evaluation and environment for high
school students.
To begin with, there are many aspects to
a college, in that it provides whether providing an academic value, as well as or reaching job opportunities.
However, one of the important roles of university is that offering students a place to
prepare for an adulthood to become a decent society member and students should
receive those opportunities as much as they wish without worrying financial
problems. Despite this of fact that, recent ongoing protests by massive college
students from private colleges in Korea against skyrocketing tuition fee
demonstrate that how much university students are struggling financial issues.
If the government can manage the university for the public like other compulsory
educational process, students would not be in a burden with a debt during university
period and could more focus on their academic improvements.
Moreover, a majority of high school
students in many countries had a stressful experience when they prepare for the
entry test to go to university. It is very competitive and forced aspects because
everyone wants to go to better level of university to avoid critical social awareness
if they entered a lower ranked bad lank of university, and it would affect when they perform social
life. Once the universities change their system to national and liberal then,
students could possibly choose their major that they want to study, instead of not just
choosing the name of university. By providing various educational choices to
young people with governmental government supports, they can have better personal conviction
and perspective on their future career.
Although, it is a still undeniable truth
that a country has many other responsibilities and roles on public, education
field, especially university places should be considered as the significant role since the
power of country can reduce the tuition problems and highly competitive social trends
among young students.
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