Some people believe that salary is the most important thing in a job. Others say the job itself is most important.
What do you think is the most important aspect of a job? Include specific details and examples to support your choice.
These days it is especially
controversial regarding whether that money is the primary reason to work or not. In the society
in which we are engaged with more competition, people are wondering whether
they should follow their dreams or seek for monetary things.. In this essay, I will analyze why work itself is
the most crucial factor as for getting a profession.
On the one hand, some
people insist that salary is the most fundamental reason why people labor. Even
if others pose importance on vocation or sacred value of some works, one cannot
realize it without budget. For instance, if someone prefer being an artist because
he or she thinks that art is most valuable of all tasks, he or she are not able
to accomplish the dream not having education or tools for painting which cost
arm and legs for them. Therefore, he or she needs to earn money first. That is
why we should prioritize money before job itself. (이 문단은 work itself를 긍정하는 또다른 내용으로 채워주셔야 합니다. 이에 대해서는 총평에서 링크를 하나 넣어드릴게요.)
However, others believe that
if one can get compensation at work which fits him or her, it would be
satisfactory even if the pay is not that high if it is not a large amount. That is, we need to go for
profession itself rather than salary. If they get self-satisfaction while
working, it would be just enough for them. In fact, many students nowadays choose
to be teachers or work for companies which are appropriate to their aptitude,
even though they have opportunities to work for conglomerates. They might look
for self-satisfaction or value of the work itself.
To sum up, I assert that though compensation is not ignorable factor as far as a job is concerned, it is not a top priority, whereas people’s aptitude and trait of works are inevitable.
총평: (6/5/6/7) 6.0
논제에서 대비되는 두 개의 사항이 주어진다고 그걸 기계적으로 양쪽 다 다루는 것이 아니라, 논제가 요구하는 바에 따라 적절히 맞춰갈 수 있어야 합니다. 지금 발문에서는 what do you think~라고 했으니까 내 생각만 적어주시면 됩니다.
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