some people claim that the media has a negative influence on contemporary society. They think that there is very little tolerance for new ideas because of its impact. to what extent do u agree or disagree.
It is a common believe belief that the media has a pessimistic influence in regard to rare toleration tolerate of the new ideas. However, I firmly believe that most parts of society has have been diversified by the positive effect of the media because, it has helped to widen one's horizons and also made society more interesting.
To begin with, the media has affected people to develop tolerance for different ways of thinking. Different from the past, that the media were most developed well, Compared to the past, these days people can easily exchange one's thoughts, feelings, and even objective informations because the media has been developed well. For example, in a political aspect, the conversation between conscious elites and unconscious publics can be shared their own opinions with the media. After this kind of interaction, can reproduce new ideas can be reproduced, by advocating or criticizing other's views.
On the top of that, the media can also make culture more divers and original. Thanks to the media that delivers a variety of informations of other countries country, now days nowadays we can combine tradition with exotic culture to become more innovative and modern. For instance, globalization in dishes such as 'Bibim Bap Barger', an America novel dish that have been interblended with traditional foods of the United States America and Korea, can illustrate how the media can allow distinct and creatable creative trends to emerge.
To sum up, the media play a role of reproducing new informations and help the development of the culture. For these reasons, it is clear that the tolerance of new ideas and wide globalization are affected more by the media.
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