You live in a small town of 10,000 people. A large green area in the centre of town is undeveloped. The city has sent out an opinion survey to see what residents would like to have built in that area.
Option A: shopping complex. This shopping mall would include restaurants, a large supermarket, and a movie theatre
Option B: recreational park. this park would include a sports complex, a large green area, and a small petting zoo.
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Some people think that a new shopping complex could boost domestic consumption and invigorate our city's economy. However, in my opinion, it is better for our city to have a recreational park, where preserving some of the green area and utilizing the rest of them in an eco-friendly way. There are two reasons why I think so.
One reason is that the population of our city is not high enough to support a new big shopping complex. If we build a big shopping mall, the mall will end up killing local businesses. To boost our local economy, it is more important to find a way to vitalize our current local businesses.
The other reason is that being an eco-friendly city is helpful to improve the health of our citizens. People love the undeveloped green area as it is (이거 안 들어가도 틀린 건 아닙니다. 단지 의미가 다를 뿐이죠.) a place to enjoy nature. A new recreational park will upgrade this enjoyment by providing a sports complex and some preserved green area with running tracks and bike lanes. A small petting zoo in the park will also attract our children to come out to enjoy the green environment.
With the aforementioned reasons above (aforementioned만 있으면 됩니다.), I am in favour of building a recreational park to improve our city.
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