▶ Your Answer : The given illustration presents two possible location of a new supermarket in Garlsdon.
In summary, S2 is located in the central area, while S1 is in the countryside where it is the suburb in this map. Overall, the railway runs through in the middle of this area near by the S1 and S2, whereas the main roads only start from the town center. <(S1 하고 S2 가 possible supermarket location을 상징한다고 전달을 해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다)
In depth, in terms of area, S2 is positioned comparatively in the Southeast area of the downtown, which is surrounded by the residential area. S2 is also relatively close to an the industry place which is in the South of this picture. On the other hand, While S1 is in the countryside of the Northwest, and it is next to in the housing area.
Moving to the method of transportation, the railway passes through the downtown, housing and countryside as well and begins from the Southeast and reaches to the Northwest. S1 and S2 are close to this railroad. While the three main roads come from the central area where S2 is located to different three different villages, which are Hindon, Bransdon and Cransiton, the road towards for Hindon passes by near by S1.
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