<Topic> You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. | |||
There are some arguments about implementing strict laws to control the amount of noise that is made by individuals. The laws have pros and cons in applying to every person in nation. The main advantage of regulating noise is that the laws make people silent in home. It would be meaningful because there are many issues about noise in apartment. For instance, the people who work hard in weekdays would want to sleep deeply on the weekend. However, if there is big noise from the upper house, the people would get stressed up even on weekend. It is a serious problem because the people get mad sometimes so that there are some noise related crimes nowadays. The strict laws would prevent this crime by regulating the amount of noise. On the other side, the laws can be
applied ungenerously to the couples who have children. In many case, children
In conclusion, the strict laws for noise
have advantages and disadvantages. | |||
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