Q.
in a number of countries, some people think
it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines
for very fast trains between cities others believe the money should be spent on
improving existing public transport.
Discuss both these views and give your own
opinion.
A.
As technology advances, a number of countries
invest in transportations. With regards to this, some people say spending a lot
of money into new railway line is worth it. This essay will discuss both point
of views (여기와 관련해서, 이게 정당화되려면 첫 문장에 public transportation이라고 적어주셔야 합니다. 그렇지 않을 경우 단순 교통을 의미하게 되며, 이때 railway역시 교통에는 해당되므로, 범위가 겹치게 돼요. 대중교통이라고 명확히 해주셔야 Railway와의 확실한 구분이 이루어집니다.) and my opinion as well.
First of all, it is important to consider
their (문단에 처음 등장하는 대상이 대명사로 쓰여서는 안 됩니다.) financial situation. However, I strongly believe, if they can afford to
invest in new railway lines, they have to carry it out. One of the reasons is
that it can lead to a positive effect. (이건 의미가 없는 문장입니다. 당연하기 때문이죠. 부정적인 효과를 가져오는데 투자할리는 없으니까요. 그냥 바로 이유로 들어가시면 됩니다.) For example, constructing new railways
can create many jobs such as, constructor, station employee, etc. (이 문장은 완전한 문장으로 바꾸시고 댓글로 검사 받으세요! 혹시 어떻게 바꿀지 모르겠다면 현재 문장을 한국어로 바꿔보시고, 그 다음에 생각해보시면 될 겁니다. 그래도 모르시겠다면 이 역시 댓글 주시면 됩니다.) Not only this,
but also delivery system will be able to become much faster now. Due to COVID19, the
demanding of the delivery is increasing. To meet this demand, the express
trains will be useful.
However, it could be cautious to claim that
constructing new railway lines is always worth it. If we have some problems
about an existing transport, we have to put more money into existing ones. I strongly
believe everything has to be step by step. If it does not, existing ones might
be no more worth it. and and people will complain about it. Similarly, this actually
happened in Korea, when the government tried to build a new subway station (subway station은 railway가 아닙니다. 얘는 대중교통에 해당하고, rrailway는 KTX등으로 보시면 돼요.) even if
we have some problems in current stations. Consequently, the government
canceled what they were trying to because of the citizens' complain.
To conclude, from a realistic point of
view, investing a lot of money into new railway lines can be worth it. However,
it has to be considered their (지칭하는 바를 명확히 밝혀주세요~) overall circumstances.
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railway와 대중교통 주제는 이거 말고도 변형돼서 잘 출제되기 때문에 이번 기회에 확실히 구분해주셔야 합니다. railway는 대한민국으로 치면 KTX, SRT, 새마을호 등으로 보시면 되고, 대중교통은 지하철과 버스 등이 해당됩니다. 잘 구분해주세요!
수고하셨습니다 :)