Your Answer ▼ In recent years, there have been a lot of controversies regarding getting loner work time. Regarding this, some people assume that it has brought some advantages in our society. However, others argue that it gives us development of economic development. In this essay, I will elaborate on the positive and negative aspects of more spending time on works.
On the one hand, there are several drawbacks of having more time on their jobs. First of all, obesity rate which is a very serious health problem these days, and its rate is becoming more and more raised. To be specific, most people who works at their office, don't (줄임말은 풀어써주시는 게 좋습니다.) work out as they are too worn out to do outdoor activities due to heavy workload from work. Moreover, it gives us detrimental effects on our posture and eyesight.
Second, employees feel under a lot of pressure. To put it another way, it is common to see people who commit suicide because of their stress from tons (구어에 해당하므로 대체해주셔야 합니다.) of workload.
According to a survey conducted by Seoul university, a substantial number of respondents who are working overtime indicated that they are stressed a lot. (위에서 했던 말에 서울대학교라는 고유명사만 붙인, 아무 의미가 없는 문장입니다.) Based on the study, it is obvious that workers shouldn't work overtime.
On the other hand, working overtime have has a merit as well. Firstly, it is good for increasing production rate. In other words, if we spend more time on our work, we can do and product produce more and more things that we have to be done more and more. For instance, by doing so, we can construct buildings and convey products to customers quickly. As the example clearly illustrates, it gives productive help to society.
To sum up, as I mentioned above, although expending work time has some merits having a merit, is more likely to have drawbacks. Given this it is advisable that employees should have more break, so that they can re-energize themselves making them more productive. (지금처럼 제언을 하는 것은 논제에서 요구된 바가 없습니다.)
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