Nowadays, people do not prefer reading the newspaper and watching the news on a TV program. Instead, they like getting information about the world form the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With an ever concern about getting information efficiently, some individuals have opined that it is more beneficial to get information around the world from the Internet. This essay will present some reasons why I firmly agree with the given opinion.
To begin with, the time consumed time-consuming for getting information coherently demonstrates why people prefer using the Internet in this issue. In a modern society in which competition between companies and nations gets worse, saving time is one of the most important things to survive in this competitive society. Especially, consuming much time to get more information and knowledge from various sources leads to failure of companies and nations to adapt to the raid changing society. Even though While people can access several information in real time by the Internet, getting information from newspapers or TV takes too much time by being updated late after accidents were occurred, and by being printed or being broadcasted. Thus, time-consuming the long time spent to get information shows the epitome of why people do not prefer reading newspapers or watching TV nesw programs to get information.
On top of that, convenience to access information describes the preference of measures for the public to get information. Recently, as having a smartphone has become a common thing in the general public, people bring their smartphones everywhere and everytime. Considering that people can access all kinds of information and knowledge around the world through their smartphones, newspapers or TV, sadly though, have become the old-fashioned measures to modern people. With a widespread free WIFI or wireless network system, it is easy to access to several libraries in many different nations and to watch the real incidents which is broadcasted by individuals’ social medias. Therefore, using the Internet can help make people get various information in the world more conveniently compared to using other measures.
In conclusion, it seems that newspapers and TV still are effective to get information at first glance. Nevertheless, I definitely believe that using the Internet is much more efficient to get information in a competitive and fast changing modern society.
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