문제
You are having a party and want to invite your friend from a different city.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:
-Describe why you are having the party
-Give directions on how to get to the venue
-Suggest how you can accommodate him/her
Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any adresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ㅇㅇ,
답변
Dear, Judy
Hi, Judy. It has been is been a while since I last wrote writing a letter to you! How's going everything going? You know what? Finally, my sister Sunmi came to vancouver Vancouver again. Before we We had a great time with together in the past, right? So I', planning a party to welcome her I'll do the party for welcomming her. If you are available please come to Vancouver vancouver, We can have a great time!
Date is September.19.Sat. The date is September 19, which is a Saturday. The venue Venue is my home. You can get off the skytrain at Vancouver vancouver city station. And (문장을 and but so로 시작하는 것은 별로 좋지 않습니다.) keep walking along the W.georgia st. If you arrive in front of the BC place, Please please call me. I'll go out!
You don't need to prepare anything, but you can stay for a few days if you want. I'll set my guestroom only for you!
Please, give me RSVP. I cannot wait for that day! Let's stay safe before our party day. I really miss you and Sunmi said so like that as well.
From. Your Sunny.
정확한 첨삭을 받고 싶어서 붉은 줄 수정 안했는데 괜찮은지요?
-> 하셔도, 안 하셔도 상관 없습니다. 대신 직접 수정하실 경우 점수는 감안하고 보셔야 해요.
목표점수 6입니다.
항상 감사드립니다!
총평: (7/6/6/5) 6.0
일단 논제의 요구사항등은 충실히 갖춰져있는 상황이니까 점수는 어느정도 벌어가실 겁니다. 그러나, 지금 빨간줄 등에서의 문제를 현재 대비 확 줄이실 수 있으면 6.5까지도 괜찮을 거에요. 고유명사를 대문자로 시작하는 것 등은 충분히 교정하실 수 있으니까, 다음에는 이런데에서 틀리지 않도록 주의해주세요!
수고하셨습니다 :)