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Nowadays, it is a very common phenomenon that people are able to buy the same products anywhere throughout the world, while some people think that it is not efficient in terms of our society which may cause negative effect on our society. From my perspective, it has both side pros and cons. So (문장을 and but so로 시작하는 것은 좋지 않습니다.) in this essay, it It will be illustrated and evaluated. To begin with, an increase in manufacturing the same product may help to supply good products at a more reasonable price to the world. The more countries attempt to make high-quality products at a low cost, the more people could purchase a variety of product within an enough budget. For instance, the imported products manufactured from China, such as clothes, mobile hones and cars have been the main consumption in Korea, where is manufactured from China factory including clothes, mobile phone and cars. People could purchase any products whenever they want in that it has shown high satisfaction in terms of customer purchasing goods. No matter how old you (2인칭은 구어에 해당하므로, 따로 쓰지 않는다고 생각하셔도 무방합니다.) are, even young people could afford high-quality products at a reasonable price. While it may be able to deteriorate the domestic market regardless of a developed country and undeveloped country. Regarding With regarding this matter, all the countries country which rely on the country produced the product at a low cost may face economic issues in a short term. For example, even 10 years ago, China was the poorest country which where just produced cheap and low-quality products to the world. However, Chinese But now china products have now saturated more than 50% of the domestic market in Korea. Following problem, Korea has been suffering from a lack of economic issues. (이 예시는 앞에서 했던 말에 고유명사랑 수치만 붙여서 반복하는 것에 지나지 않기때문에 좋지 않긴 한데.....6.0에서 중요한 사항은 아니므로 그냥 넘기겠습니다.)
As a result, the increase in imported products at a more reasonable price play a vital role in the world regarding cost-effective products to the customer. Otherwise, the constant purchasing products to the countries where supply with a low cost would not help domestic market growth. (여기는 댓글 주세요!) 310 word 문장 탬플랫 참조 많이 어렵지않은 주제 문제 > 다양하지않은 문장구조 , 부자연스러운 전치사 사용 in on of about … a/the 사용, 가산/불가산, 문법 문제 깔끔하지않은문장 문장을 길게 만드는능력?? -> 절대 안 됩니다. 절대요!! 길게 쓰지 마세요! 금지입니다.
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