<Topic> The graphs below show the average monthly expenditure on
children’s sports and participation in different sports in the UK from 2008
to 2014. Average monthly
spending on children’s sports
Participation in three different sports |
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The given two line charts plot the monthly average
expenses on youngster’s sports and the number of children’s attendance
Generally speaking, the expenditure for the students’
workout grew up throughout the given years. Young people enjoyed football the
most and while the students’ admissions of the swimming depicts a gradual climb, that of athletics inmates a dramatic soar
In regard to the average monthly spending on
adolescents’ sports, the graph escalated steadily for six years. As to the number of children’s sports attendance |
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