Discuss the effects of a criminal’s right to a trial by jury.
Is this a positive or negative thing? How does this affect criminals and society?
It is commonly known that
in most nations, culprits who are accused of a crime have a right to claim
their innocence in a court of law before they are convicted. I believe that
this policy has positive virtues. Moreover, it can give normal citizens the right to
participate in social activities such as vote.
Firstly, the jury trials are positive because
it prevents ordinary mankind from being prosecuted prosecuting without sins by the government. It
is a well- known fact that by remaining policy of this, people can consistently
monitor gigantic issues related to absurdities of laws. For example, in South
Korea, after introducing the jury trials, the rate of absurdities has
considerably decreased in the most court of laws. Since evidences of crime have
to be shown to the court of law, the jury trials give an opportunity that
proves innocence to accused people. For this reason, it is evident that the
jury trials could drop the likelihood that innocent citizens could be
convicted.
Moreover, the jury trials also give innumerable advantages on society because they allow citizens to have the chance of being part of trials. Many experts believe that people’s attention is getting bigger about being part of social members at legal process. For example, countries that require jury trials have a higher voter turnout rate. This clearly illustrates that jury trials affect social participation of citizens. Therefore, it is undeniable that participating in legal process can have positive effects on society. (이 문장은 사실 큰 의미는 갖지 않습니다. 후케이님께서도 딱히 쓸 내용이 없어서 뭐라도 넣으려고 작성하신 것일테고, 아마 다른 수험생들도 대부분 내용 채우기 어려웠을 거에요.)
Overall, jury trials have
positively affected people because they provide innocent people with chances
that protect themselves from being accused, and by involving ordinary people in
the legal process, they have increased there was an increase in social participation.
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이번 차트는 저에게 너무 어려운 주제라서 쓰면서도 정말 이상한게 느껴졌습니다. 제생각에는 고칠 부분이 너무 많다고 생각되니 선생님께서 자세하게 첨삭안해주셔도 감사하겠습니다. 죄송합니다 ㅠ
총평: (5/6/7/6) 6.0
이번 글도 표현상으로는 괜찮았는데, 내용상 살짝 보완이 필요합니다. 두 번째 질문을 보시면 how does this affect criminals and society라는 표현이 있으므로, 사회에 대한 영향 외에도 피고인에 대한 영향 역시 서술할 수 있어야 해요. 물론 본론 첫 번째 문단에 그러한 내용이 아주 간접적으로 잠시 반영되긴 했지만, 이를 넘어서 본론 두 번째 문단에 대놓고 보일 수 있어야 합니다.
수고하셨습니다 :)