Some people say that the extensive use of computers in schools will replace the role of teachers.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Innumerable mankind believes that the role of teachers would diminish in the future because the wide range of use of computers will replace works the teachers do. However, I do not support this opinion as the role of computers is not invariably appropriate for all the jobs like the work that elucidate detail contents of a class to students, and I think the use of computers can help the teachers to handle administrative works.
To begin
with, although the use of computers has already become prevalent in the current
class, the (관사는 그냥 참고로만 보시고, 너무 깊게 들어가지는 마세요~) teachers provide more than just information to the students. It is a
well- known fact that the teachers can explain more detailed parts using extra
materials while the computers only provide restricted information. For
examples, the computers only teach to children prepared materials, but the
teachers can teach (여기는 teach말고 다른 표현으로 대체가 가능하므로 한번 바꿔보세요! 후케이님 실력이면 충분히 바꾸실 수 있을 겁니다.) something such as a sense of motivations and belonging. As
this shows, that the teachers teach not only materials concerning academic
subjects, but also invisible feelings. For this reason, it is seen that it is
hard for the computers to replace the role of the teachers.
What is more, it is apparent that the role of the computers cannot outweigh the teachers doing jobs that have to be handled manually such as administrative work. Many experts assert that if automatic systems handle this kind of work, many errors are more likely to occur in the middle of processes. For instance, in Norway, most cities allotted the computers in the most schools to handle various administrative works, but they made a disappointed result because only 32% of computers made an accurate result. (이렇게 쓰는 건 위에서 했던 말에 노르웨이와 32%만 뭍여서 반복하는 것에 지나지 않습니다.) Therefore, it is evident that the teachers are more accurate in terms of dealing with work needed mankind’s efforts.
Given the evidence stated above, it is clear that the extensive use of the computers is getting bigger and bigger. However, I believe that the computers will never surpass teacher’s role in schools.
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