Going overseas for university study is an exciting prospect for many people. But while it may offer some advantages, it is probably better to stay home because of the difficulties a student inevitably encounters living and studying in a different culture. Agree or Disagree?
At present, we live in an age of globalization, where it is easier to go abroad for studying, travelling and job than the previous. According to these experiences, people can learn about different cultures and take a broader view of the world. Personally, I disagree with the view that living and studying in hometown may provide better advantages than staying overseas. This essay focuses on concrete advantages by going abroad for university study like improving language skills and having more opportunities aa job-seeking when seeking for jobs overseas.
By studying overseas, it is required to have a command of a foreign language for academic study at university. It means he/she has second language skills and it is able to read a wider variety of professional papers which others who stay at home are impractical of. Then, students who study overseas will get greater knowledge and their academic satisfaction will be high as well.
Today's generation prefers to work overseas. However, there are a lot of hurdles to get over, for examples, language skills, adapting different cultures and social network etc. In this regard, if If a student studies and graduates from overseas, it will be much easier than others completing a study in home. By spending a campus life abroad, the concerning about required matters in a job-seeking overseas will be less.
Even though there are drawbacks to stay and study overseas, it's (줄임말은 풀어써주셔야 합니다. 고로 it is 로 가시면 돼요.) worth it to try and get a better advantage which is affected has an affect in the better future.
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