A chunk of celebrities like movie stars or pop stars get the vast money and it has led been lead them to a luxurious life. However, a number of them live an unhappy life compared to what we expect compares we have ever thought. In my opinion, as they always have a lot of people who just aimed their fame or money, it is hard to know how to be a friend with others for them. Then, they may tend to desire bigger happiness or success which can lead them to illegal actions way.
First of all, most of the celebrities have many fake friends who wanted to borrow their popularity. It is an opportunity for them to be more famous by using celebrities. Some Hollywood stars also were used by their friend like this that the friends would get more popularity and fame. These circumstances, thus so, have made them suspicious of other people who are approaching them. Then those prone to disturb to make some relationships as well.
Second, they already feel the largest happiness or success regarding their work, fame as well as money. On the other hand, people always want to feel a new sense of happiness and also desire to get more success with stimulus. For example, a singer who is in jail at the moment established an organisation that was included in an illegal way. Presumably, he desired to succeed be another success from other parts excluding his work area, and he might have thought it would have brought more money and bigger happiness.
In conclusion, a number of people such as actors or singers experience the difficulties about getting real friends, so they are likely to choose drugs to rely on, for relying on instead of friends. Also, a lot of successful stars want to be happier and get more money, thus they may try to work in illegal sectors. Therefore, those factors make them to live in an unhappy and unfortunate situation.
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