Q.
some people believe that it is good to
share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the
academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable
to be shared freely.
A.
People often argue that whether public is
more important or the private interest is more important. With regards to this
argument, some people say ideas and information have to be shared as much as
they can, while others say there are some information which are too precious to share. This essays will
discuss both point of views and my opinion as well.
First of all, there’s (줄임말은 풀어써주셔야 합니다. 다른데에도 다 풀어주시면 돼요.) no doubt that many
things what we know in the world come from someone’s ideas. Of course, someone
earns money by a copyright, but some people others just shared their ideas for the
better society. From the community’s point of view, sharing the ideas of people
has a tremendous effect. As By showing their own thoughts, we can develop our
society.
Nevertheless, some people still want to
keep their information, but I do not agree with that. Even though I do think
that information has to be shared, people have to get a reasonable price
about their working. I consider the reason why people do not want to give their
valuable things is all about the money. However, the problem can be solved by getting a patent. If someone got a patent, he or she has a right about their
information and the other people can not infringe one’s copyright. For instance,
one of the richest person persons in the world, Bill Gates, earn countless money by
inventing Microsoft, of which what he got a patent.
To conclude, actually, I don’t want to blame
someone who don’t want to give their one’s work, since I’m sure they put a lot
of effort in that. However, I want to encourage them to share their works for
the better society and the better future.
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