In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.
Why is this the case?
What can be done about this problem?
As machinery for agriculture has been developed, the agriculture industry has also been advanced rapidly. It is possible that only a few workforces in agriculture are adequate to provide foods for majority of people. However, there are still those who face poverty and hunger issues around the world. In this essay, I will discuss the cause of the problem and suggest a plausible solution.
The reason why many people still go hungry
is because the allotment is not implemented equitably to all people. The development of
agriculture brought about the development of industry because there was a
surplus of workforces. Accordingly, as the other industry develops, people experience
a gap between the rich and the poor, and the this gap is getting enormous. For
example, developed countries such as USA or UK have abundant crops and foods
they cannot eat up, but they do not distribute their surplus to those in need. Even
though the main industry of the developing countries is agriculture, they just
export foods inexpensively. They lay behind the world economic trend, so they
cannot predominate a good position of setting up the product’s price.
Therefore, they are still in poverty and feel hungry.
In order to solve the problem, developed countries should help developing countries to distribute the opulence through both government organizations and non-government organizations. A number of countries are implementing official development aids. Specifically, US set up USAID, and Korea has its own government organization called KOICA. Through the organizations, many countries build agriculture institute to train people and teach their knowhow about agriculture or provide agricultural instruments to help farmers work easily in developing countries. They also encourage corporate social responsibility of companies to minimize the gap. By doing so, people in developing countries can make a profit.
To sum up, the social system is not fair enough, so the distribution of opulence is not occurring impartially. Therefore, developed countries have to have responsibility about it and support the countries who need help.
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