Some people say students of different age groups in school should be put in the same class. What is your opinion?
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Many may think, and I agree, that a class
with student with various ages is very helpful for the students to develop
their social skills. It is very clear that peer groups play an important role
to make a person to fit in a society, spending time together. Furthermore, if
there are many chances to observe behavior patterns of different age groups, he
or she can understand what an/the 중 하나 acceptable standard is. Moreover, young students can learn how to became
being able to distinguish right from wrong by learning from older students in the
class.
Second, allowing students of various age to communicate in the same class makes them develop creativity under challenging circumstances. Normally, there are expectations in our society, which are expected to be achieved by students at a certain age, called as social clock. For example, in mathematics, a student is expected to understand a simple plus minus question at age 8 and a more complicated question at age 15. In this case, if students who are at age 8 and 15 can discuss together on a problem, a student at age 8 can get help from the order one to solve the issue that requires higher intelligence than what he has, even can imagine the big picture of the logic. At the same time, the order students can be stimulated by basic questions from the younger students, seeing through the problems. They both can achieve their problem-solving skills beyond the social clock.
In conclusion, I believe a class with students of different age groups is very helpful to develop student’s social skills and creativities by learning from each other.
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목표 : Writing 7.0
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-> 아쉽게도 자연스럽지 않습니다ㅠㅠ
그리고 컴퓨터 아이엘츠에서 문단을 저렇게 들여쓰기없이 나누어도 감점이 없을지요?
->네, 저렇게 해주시면 됩니다. 실제 시험측에서 예시로 보여준 답안에도 들여쓰기가 따로 없어요 :)
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감사합니다.
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