Some
people believe that school children should not be given homework by their
teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the
education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.
With increasing attention
about education, there are some debates about the needs of children’s homework. While
some advocators argue that homework is beneficial for children’s academic achievement,
I think giving homework to students is giving a burden to them.
Admittedly,
homework is one of the good ways to help student’s scholar development. Students
can revise and apply what they learned in school by doing homework. For
example, when I was in high school, my science teacher made me to take a mini
test about the chapter I studied on that day as homework. By doing it, I was able
to revise the information and figure out what I didn’t (줄임말은 풀어써주셔야 합니다.) understand fully and needs needed more study. Also, educators can teach students beyond limited time of class through
giving them homework.
However,
the thing is that students are already overwhelmed by the amount of study they
are required to do. Students spend nearly one-third of a day in school. For instance,
in Korea, high school students spend 8 hours in school and some schools force
them to study until late night after school. This large amount of study gives
them huge stress. Moreover, there are some important parts in adolescence adolescent such
as friendship and physical and mental health, other than getting a high score.
To sum up, although doing homework
can help develop student’s academic skill, they already devote enough time on studying
and adding more tasks on them is critical to their mental health and overall growth.
Therefore, I believe that teachers should not give students any homework.
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지금까지 task 2는 그래도 시간이 괜찮았는데 오늘 마지막에 단어수 체크해보니 단어가 235단어 밖에 안되서 급하게 늘리다보니 시간을 넘겼네요. 예전에도 다 쓰고나니 단어수가 모자라서 급하게 내용을 추가했던 적이 있는데 분량을 맞추는 연습이 좀 더 필요할 것 같네요. 항상 첨삭 감사드립니다. :)
- 전체점수:
- Task Response: 6
- Coherence and Cohesion: 7
- Lexical Resource: 7
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 7
총평: 7.0
내용이 그렇게 풍부한 편은 아니었지만, 다른 부분은 다 깔끔해서 점수는 벌어갈 겁니다. 이정도면 Task1에서 발목을 잡히는 걸 고려해도 6.5는 충분히 받아요.
그래도 연습 단계에서부터, 주제 상관없이 항상 270~80자를 확보하는 연습을 해주세요! 그래야 실전에서도 250자를 안정적으로 쓰실 수 있습니다.
수고하셨습니다 :)