The given pictures provide information about how the Islip town will be changed after innovation. (현재의 모습도 보이고 있기 때문에, 이에 대한 내용이 추가되어야 합니다.)
In general, some shops will have innovation be modified into brand new shopping facility, besides, transportation facilities and new accommodations will be added. Moreover, the road system will have a change to improve people's efficient shopping and safety.
On closer inspection, at the present the shops are located at the north and south side of the main road in a row respectively. On the middle area there are housing and park, and on the south, other housing and school are located.
In the future, the main road will be replaced by a dual carriageway which will surround the town. In addition, shops on the north of the main road will be substituted by a bus station, shopping centre, car park and new housing. Also there will be the road only for pedestrians replacing the main road at the present. On the south area of the south shops, new housing will be added and the size of the park will decrease. Outside the dual carriageway, a the school will have changes in (innovation 은 지도 문제에서 그냥 배제하세요~) which have some innovation in appearance and housing will be located.
총평: (7/6/6/6) 6.5
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