Nowadays, we can watch entertainment performance from the screen (laptop, etc) and no need to watch it live. To what extent do you agree?
These days, as technology has significantly
developed, people are able to enjoy entertainment shows by using their
electronic devices like TV and computers. Therefore, some people say that it is
not necessary to go to theaters or concert halls while others disagree with it.
In my opinion, although people can watch various performances by using their
gadgets, there are several limitations compared to a live performance, so I
believe that it is worth enjoying live stages.
Firstly, I think there are several
advantages that watching performances at home cannot offer. Above all, screens
are not able to deliver the mood of the stage to audiences, so people cannot
feel passion and delight from the performance stage. For example, when people
go to a concert hall to appreciate music, they can listen to loud sounds and
experience the heat of the crowd. (여기의 경우 표현+근거+문법 모두 아주 좋습니다. 다른 수험생들도 참고해보세요!) These elements give people an amazing
impression that screens cannot bring make. Therefore, many people want to watch live
performances despite quite expensive tickets since they present it presents an extraordinary
experience for them.
On top of that, live performances offer
performers like singers, actors, and players encouragement or energy. If
performers present their shows without audiences, they would not show their
performances passionately since attendances play a significant role in stages.
Interacting with people could enhance the ability of performers, so the show end complete successively. Furthermore, if people do not enjoy live performances,
artists would lose their stage. As a result, it is hard to expect excellent
performers to appear.
In conclusion, I believe that even though
nowadays some people prefer watching multiple shows by screens, live
performances have several profits that offer surprising experiences to
audiences and aspire performers to play greatly. Therefore, in some aspects,
live stages outweigh watching shows at home.
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