[문제]
In the 21st century, the average life expectancy is increasing.
What problems will this cause for individuals and society?
Suggest some solutions that could be taken to reduce the effect of aging populations.
[답 첫번째]
As the average life expectancy has risen in the recent times, the average life expectancy is on a rise there is a growing aging populations and this will lead to a lot of problems to both individuals and society. Although aging populations has become a significant problems, at least there are some solutions on the horizon.
The most obvious problems with aging populations are older people’s diseases and crisis of governments’ tax revenues. Elderly people are easily likely to be exposed to by various diseases and most of countries do not have enough hospital facilities. In addition, there may be severe problems with securing our pension and retirement system. For instance, in South Korea, the vast majority of people retire on their when they are 60 or even earlier. If the government have difficulties with tax revenue, they should be taken (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요? 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.) all of those burden to the aged.
Although solving these problems is not easy, there are feasible steps which we can take. One effective solution is elderly people doing exercise and eating a well-balanced diet to stay healthy. This is because preventing prevention is always better than cure. As economically active people increases, governments are more likely to solve in the pension shortfall. Furthermore, older people are able to reduce the potential for poverty.
In conclusion, it it clear that there are various problems for average life span getting longer, and the steps mentioned above are needed to tackle this phenomenon.
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