Some colleges encourage students to create businesses while they are still in school
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
---답안---
There are mixed opinions about launching
business during school life. Although some are concerned about creating company of
university students creating a company, I strongly believe that it is desirable to create business
for young students.
On the one hand, some people argue that it
is hard to manage both business and school assignments. Students who have their
own company juggle business and school life, which could ruin one of them, or
in the worst scenario, both of them. According to research surveyed on students who
have experienced creating business, for example, over half of them answered
that their grade was lowed lowered when running a company. (사실 여기, 즉 연구에 따르면~은 이렇게 써서는 안 되긴 합니다. 그러나
However, there I is a more persuasive argument
that students who have started their business could applicate theory which they
learned from college to their business. Students could study more effectively
by learning and doing than only study by learning. For instance, there is a case that university
students whose major is fashion launched their own apperal brand. It became the
most popular brand among young people. Its owners interviewed that it was
helpful to reflect theoritical part to their business, which also helped them
to get a good grade and do assignment in college.
To sum up, it is evident that running a company during school life is beneficial because it could applicate theory to
their work place.
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