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A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community.
Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Total 200 words
In my opinion, it is a wonderful news that Celpip company would like to launch a large factory near our community. I believe that this factory would invigorate our economy for the with following two reasons.
One reason is that the new factory will increase the employment rate in our community. As our town is small a small town, many of young people have left our town to find a job. Also, for the last few years, our economy was not that good, so many people have suffered from unemployment. However, the new factory would create few thousands of jobs. It would certainly be is very beneficial to our residents.
The other reason is that employees of the factory will boost local businesses. The new factory will bring current and new employees from other cities to our town. The increased population of our community would definitely increase domestic consumption. For example, when Amazon built a warehouse in Delta in British Columbia, many people moved from Vancouver Island to Delta. Many restaurants and pubs near the warehouse became (YOOL님 정도 실력이면 이런 거는 맞춰주셔야 합니다.) become very busier than before.
With the aforementioned reasons, I am in favor of launching a new large factory near our community. It would obviously have a good impact on our local economy.
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