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Q. Some people believe that the personal information of violent criminals should be made available to the public. Others think that this information should be protected. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is a common belief that the private information of criminals should be kept in secret to protect the rights of humans. However, there is a more persuasive argument that this information should be released to the society to protect the general citizens and help them be careful of criminals.
On the one hand, some people say that it should be impossible to look for information of crucial criminals who commit violent acts such as killing someone, stealing something and so on. This is because that they should be protected their basic rights of humans which noone else can infringe upon is that no one can infringe others private. Moreover, if criminals’ information was showed too much, it would generate some disadvantages to their innocent family. In addition, it could be double punishment to them by being made available to the public. For example, there are some criminals who are not able to get a new job and keep their livelihood. It could be an immense pressure to them to maintain their living and come back to society.
Nevertheless, I support the idea that the personal information of cruel criminals should be opened to the public to protect ordinary people. The public should know who are criminals, what they committed, where they live now, and even how they look like. This is because they did crucial things to others, and people don’t (줄임말은 풀어써주셔야 합니다.) have to protect them. By being releasing the private information of them, normal citizens are able to be careful of them. Moreover, due to this regulation, the criminals can have pressure not to commit violent acts again. A good example of this occurred in Korea, where show some information of cruel criminals was shown. After the government in Korea released the private information, the repeated crime rate has decreased dramatically. Considering this fact, opening the information of criminals is essential to guarantee of the security.
To sum up, while it is apparent that the information of criminals should be protected to give one more chance to them and keep their rights, but it is undeniable that usual citizens should know the private information of crucial criminals to watch out those them who come back to society.
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