These figures illustrate the proportion of some garbages which came from one city with several places including Arden park, Diego Park and Memorial Park and classified with a lot of rubbish which are glass, cans, bottles and so on.
Overall, it is shown that quarter of cigarette rubbish collected together in one city and this proportion is more higher than the others following the first chart. In addition, this amount is similar with these two types of rubbish between plastic bottles and aluminium cans at 33 percent.
With regard to the other figure, in the location of two parks and a beach, there is a majority of rubbish that includes Tyres which takes a huge amount of rubbish in the beach with 563 kilograms. In these locations of the city, the rubbish of cigarette butts always collected with specific proportion not only small but sometimes also large from 9 to 214.
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목표점수 6.0~6.5
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