Most countries allow 18 year olds to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow it at this age, while others think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.
These days most countries allow 18 year olds to start driving a car. It is a common belief that it is good to allow it at that age. However,there (여기 띄어쓰기 문제는 없다고 가정하겠습니다.) is a more persuasive argument that the age to start driving should be at least 25. In this essay, I will discuss both views and represent my personal opinion.
On the one hand, some people assert people who are more than 18 years olds can drive well, because and they are not children and are already adults. They think that more than 18 age people already got a driver license, so they can conceive and perceive some situations without big trouble, and also they need experience. As a result, these experiences will make far better skills to drive a car, which it leads to less car accidents in the future.
Nevertheless, others insist that people who are 18 year olds are too young to drive. They are still young and have a lot of curiosity about not only just driving but also all things, so it is dangerous to drive a car. Also, there are there are lots of car accident by car nowadays. The recent data showed that the car accident proportion of 18-24 year olds made up more than a half in Korea in 2018, from a research by one of the car insurance companies research. It means that they are adults in age, but too dangerous to drive a car.
To sum up, while people who are 18 year olds are already an adult, it is undeniable that they are still young and have too many risks to start to drive a car. For this reason, I agree with the opinion that the age to start driving should be at least 25.
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