In many countries, Paying for thing using mobile phone (cellphone) app is becoming increasingly common.
Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?
Since the first type has developed in 1973, mobile phones have evolved
today. Besides, we can do what only computers can do on our their phones through
the software called app. As a result, these electronic devices have become an
essential thing for modern people over the world. At now, people can pay for a merchandise or service through an app. as app whether the offline store or online store and the
rate are gradually increasing. There are arguments about this phenomenon and I
will explain why this issue has more good points than bad. (서론은 전혀 중요하지 않습니다. 그냥 빠르게 넘기시고 본론에 집중해주세요!)
The best advantage of the
individual for paying by the app is convenience. The payment by cash always is
available, however, it is a hassle to prepare it. Moreover, it is cumbersome to
carry cash if the amount of money increases. In contrast, even the largest
amount of price can be easily paid with their smartphone. Moreover, mobile
phones are designed to be portable from the start. In other words, thanks to
its ease of carrying and simple payment, cell phones are now indispensable. For
these reasons, in view of the individual, it is more preferred than payment by
cash.
As for the The side of government, electronic payment makes it easy to easily check to
citizen's spending trends and taxes. The traditional methods of spending trend
were to distribute questionnaires to citizens or to ask owners such as a store
or department store. However, this method relies on people's answer and there
is no guarantee of accuracy. On the
contrary, payments using the app are made electronically, thus the government can
more accurately check people's consumption trends and tax payment. This allows
officers to establish policies for citizens through more proper taxation.
Although there are weak points
about app payment such as security issue, it is solved by continuous
management. Therefore, payment by the app is more efficient and simpler than
the existing one, so shortly, this method will become mainstream.
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