목표점수 6.0 / 시험날짜 11월 말 / 총 30분 소요 , 단어수 251, 외부도움x
Some people believe that development of artificial intelligence will make human labour obsolete. Others think that work performed by humans will always be important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is a common belief that the promotion of artificial intelligence will replace human labour. However, there is a more persuasive argument that work done did by humans will always be essential. This is because Because AI can not offer instant solutions and even there are still many errors in AI systems.
On the one hand, many robots and AI systems will replace humans because it is more efficient and cheaper than humans in the long run. In fact, a lot of jobs have disappeared these days, such as cashers, counsellors and packers. According to a research which was surveyed by the institution of jobs, more than 100 jobs will be vanished in the near future, including cleaners who clean the buildings, drivers, farmers and servers.
Nevertheless, I support the idea that humans will always be important. Humans are essential part of the workforce. Because, because humans can deal with the instant problems suiting with the circumstances. The robot which has have an artificial intelligence can not resolve an exception which is not put in their system.. Also there are still many errors in the AI systems. For example, in London, despite most shops use payment machines, there are many staffs who help the customers that have some problems with machines. Those staffs help people instantly to pay the money and check the errors.
To sum up, while it is apparent that the robot with artificial intelligence is efficient and will make human labour old-fashioned, it is undeniable that humans will always be main by controlling the AI system.
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