The charts give information about the
annual music sales in the UK between 1990 and 2020. Overall, with the exception
of digital/downloaded music, nowadays the other three markets are almost dead in
nowadays.
In the 1990’s, this scale of music industry was
quite small compared to the 2000’s. No one listened to downloaded to music by downloading until
2000. However, since 2000, it showed an upward trend. In 2010, it made a profit
of 500 pounds. After 5 years, it had more than double that of 2010, which was
around 1,500 (네 자리가 넘어가면 쉼표를 넣어주셔야 합니다). pounds. In the The last year of this chart, approximately 2000 pounds were
made by digital music industry.
On the other hand, it (얘가 뭔지를 지칭해주세요!) showed a totally different aspect. The industry of CD’S showed a little fluctuation. It marginally rose over to the year of 2000, and then it kept decreasing. At the start year of given chart, it made a high profit of among four different music industries (500 pounds). Finally, in 2020, CD industry made almost 100 pounds. The market of cassettes and vinyl had similar figures. The profit of these was under 250 pounds in entire years of given chart.
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