The graph shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over in three countries, Japan, Sweden and USA from 1940 to 2040.
Overall, it is
predicted that the proportion of people aged 65 and over will increase until
2040 in three countries. Although there are fluctuations, the general tendency will show a rise (같은 말이지만 msg를 쳐드렸습니다.) It sometimes go up and down but increase entirely.
On the other hand, the elderly Elderly proportion of USA
is the highest among three countries in 1940 but it will be the lowest in 2040.
It decreased between 1980 and 2020 but it is expected to increase gradually
after 2020.
In Sweden, the rate of old people aged 65 and over decreased (increase decrease는 동의어가 정말 많습니다. 잘 활용해주세요!) in 1980s and is expected to fall down from 2010 to the beginning of 2020. However, that of Sweden will also increase gradually from 7% in 1940 to 25% in 2040.
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