Many small local shops are closing as they are unable to compete with large supermarkets in the area. How does this affect local communities? How could this situation be improved?
It is undeniable that many shops located in local areas are losing their competiveness due to huge supermarkets. Personally, I believe that this phenomenon has detrimental impacts on local communities, but giant supermarkets also affect positive impacts on local communities, and I will outline some measures that can be taken steps to improve this situation.
To start with, for about 12 years (12년이 왜 들어갔는지 조금 의아하긴 한데, 일단 제가 이해한 바에 따라 바꿔드렸습니다.) it was common for people to
purchase some commodities they need in the local street markets about 12 years
age. However, buying something in the local shops has become a rarity after a
large number of huge supermarkets have been constructed in the local areas. Hence,
this results directly in vanishing traditional shopping cultures such as haggling
prices. This type of shopping custom is not allowed when shopping in a global
behemoth like Costco and Walmart. On the other hand, shopping in large
supermarkets could have a positive effect on local communities. For example, in comparison
to local shops, mammoth supermarkets have many parking lots, which are really
important for shoppers who use their own cars every time they shop. In this
regard, some people prefer to visit to large supermarkets.
There are several methods to solve problems
described above. Firstly, government could create a new law to force that large supermarkets to close every weekends to encourage people to go to local shops. For instance, the Korean
government enforced the law in practice to revitalize local street markets’
traditional ambiance a couple of years ago. As a result, local citizens had to should
go to local shops if they need to purchase grocery items on weekends. In terms
of lack of parking space in local shops, merchants working in local shops need
to collect some money to expand parking space for regular patrons. If this plan
would do the trick, they might be able to attract more people’s attentions.
In conclusion, although it is true that although people’s attentions towards local shops have significantly diminished during the last decade, I believe that there are some effective solutions to recover local shops’ reputation.
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1. 6.5 점이 목표입니다!
2. 333 자 10월10일 입니다 늦어도 11월 까지는 만들고 싶어요~!!
3. 42분걸렸습니다. 아이디어 잡는게 늘 힘드네요 ㅠ. 최대한 줄여보도로 노력 해보겠습니다!!! 외부도움 없었습니다!
총평: (7/6/7/6) 6.5
양산님의 경우 이전에 말씀드렸듯이 적어도 task2는 크게 문제 없습니다. 지금 당장 시험을 치르셔도 시간 문제만 없다면 task2에서는 6.5-7.0 받으실 거에요. 대신 task1은 항상 복병이 되는데, 여기도 첨삭받으면서 요령만 챙기시면 괜찮을 겁니다. 11월은 필요 없습니다. 적어도 라이팅에 있어서는 10월 10일에 무조건 졸업하실 수 있을 거에요.
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