The given flow chart illustrates a possible means of the home energy production.
Overall, it is evident that there are seven distinct stages, from gathering compost into the steel tank to sending electricity to the houses, which is possible method in the future.
Looking at the diagram more closely, one can see that in the first stage, the composts such as leaves, food and water are filled into the steel tank, which makes methane gas. Then, this gas is moved to the methane gas storage, also this gas is compressed presses on in the compressor. After that, the compressed gas is conveyed to the combustion engine tank, in here where the gas becomes mechanical energy. The energy is sent to the generator in the factory. Following this, the electrical energy is put into the battery where the electrical energy is stored which is electrical energy storage. In the final stage, the houses receive are received this electricity, which is possible means in the future for the house energy production.
15분 걸렸어용! 단어 모르는게 있어서 조금 고민하다 그냥 막 적었네요ㅠㅠ
총평: (6/6/6/6) 6.0
'미래에 가능한 방법' 이라는 표현은 그리 중요하지는 않습니다. 서론에만 넣으시면 돼요. (아마 분량 채우시느라고 어쩔 수 없이 넣은 것 같기는 합니다.)
그 외에 크게 문제되는 사항은 없었기 때문에, 6.0 정도는 괜찮을 겁니다. 무난하게 잘 써주셨어요
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