The tables illustrate how much Fairtrade-labelled tea and pineapples were sold in the year 2010 and 2015 in 5 European countries.
Overall, most of the tea and pineapples in 2015 were sold more than in 2010, only 2 countries sold less pineapples those in the year 2015 less than at the previous period.
Initially, the five countries(France, Austria, Germany, Netherland, and Norway) increased the whole sectors of 2015 sales (수동으로 바꿔서 검사받으세요! 밑에서 말씀드리겠지만, 어차피 이 글은 다시 쓰셔야 하기 때문에 댓글 말고 그냥 재작성 글과 함께 검토받으시면 됩니다.) which were measured by millions of euros. (((((The biggest change was seen in France. Their income was 2.5 million euros, and they earned 21 million euros in 2015 (혹시 이거 패러프레이징하려고 이렇게 적으신 거면, 그러실 필요 없습니다. Task1에서 항목은 따로 패러프레이징의 대상이 아니에요.) at the latest period. Then the smallest increase was recorded by Norway that was 18. million euros in the year 2010 and 2 million euros in the year 2015.
Secondly, Austria got 48 million euros in the current year, which was threefold of the previous year. Also, the income was escalated by France and Netherlands in the later period, compares to in 2010.))))) (파란색 괄호까지 전부 항목, 즉 파인애플인지 tea인지를 적어주셔야 합니다.) On the other hand, Norway's pineapples sales' result went down, 2.8 million euros(2010) to 2 million euros(2015). Besides, Germany which sold 3 million euros in 2010 got almost two-third of the previous income(1.9 million euros). (여기도 마찬가지이고요.)
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