Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is considered that people nowadays have too many selections attributable to a variety of factors. I steadfastly agree with this statement taking our current social phenomenon and an advanced technology into consideration.
To begin with, as time goes by, an increased population brings about a number of choices that people could make. It is axiomatic that the increased number of people today results in diverse perspectives, thoughts, and beliefs. These varied ways of thinking create an array of new occupations that did not exist in the past, such as designers specialised in dog’s fur, and organisations that deal with current social issues that did not happen in the past. These newly developed concepts would make people have too many choices, which allows them to feel confused about what to choose.
On top of that, on account of the developed technology, especially the Internet (인터넷은 고유명사이므로 대문자 시작입니다.) internet, people are offered many different choices. It is an undeniable fact that the internet Internet helps people to know a storehouse of information and knowledge ranged from rudimentary facts to expertise. However, as this technology bestows various perspectives at once on a single subject, it could make people wonder whether viewpoint is the one they are looking for and adrift in the midst of the flowing data. For example, in an effort to search for certain information, people need to compare a number of websites, YouTube channels, or experts online in modern days.
In conclusion, when all specific reasons and relevant examples are considered and evaluated, I firmly believe that those living in the 21st century have too much difficulties about what to choose.
목표 7.0, 감사합니다!
task 2 질문보면 장점이 단점보다 outweigh 하냐? 라고 물어보는 질문이 잇는데, 이거는 두 입장 다 서술하고 intro conclusion애서 제 의견 쓰면 되는거죠??
이것만 유념하면 되나요? 혹시나 걱정되어서요 ㅠㅠ
-> '9점 기준으로는' 그것보다 조금 더 들어가셔야 하는데, 그게 조금 어려우며, 애초에 9점 필요로 하시는 것도 아니기 때문에 그렇게까지 들어가지 않아도 됩니다. 위에 적어주신대로만 가도 무방한데, 대신 ,~가 ~를 outweigh한다! 는 확실히 밝혀주세요!
총평: (7/7/8/7) 7.5
task2가 이정도로만 쓰이면, Task1에서 말아먹는 거 고려해도 7.0은 받으실 겁니다. 내일 긴장하지 마시고! 수학 등에서 욕심 내지 마시고! 제 실력만 잘 발휘하고 오세요!
수고하셨습니다 :)