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In this era of modernization, there are a lot of enormous children who desire success. Obviating the fact that today's youth
have a different identity to study, parents and teachers are likely to tell
them that they can make anything possible if they do their best. While
acknowledging that this makes adolescents be motivated to improve themselves, I
believe the drawbacks of giving children this message is crucial (초록색은 밑에서 말씀드리겠습니다.).
On the other hand, encouragement is an
essential part of developing youth's identity and confidence. Every child has
different faculty and personality; thus, people's attention will not only make
them aware of their ability, but it will also help them to gain confidence,
which plays an important role in upbringing. I was the one who had
over-complimented from both my parents and teachers at my school. After failing
the National examination, my brother had been encouraged by my family. He was
able to realize the actual position in terms of his academic works, and he
could also gain confidence which made him go one step further. Finally, he had
an opportunity to go to a university in England last year. (이 예시, 그리고 바로 밑의 문단의 예시도 이전과 마찬가지입니다. 그냥 예시 없이 일반으로 가세요!)
However, unrealistic advice from a variety
of people would have an adverse effect on today's youth. The reason is that
there are several components, such as luck, finance, talents, and efforts, that
are required to be successful. Take Chinese high school students as an example;
when I was in China, they are told that they can enter their dream universities
if they try their best. In contrast, not all of them achieve their dream and
have a state of well-being. For this reason, I believe an unnecessary message
often exacerbates the situation.
In conclusion, it is true that
encouragement for children has significance to children who can improve their
ability and gain confidence. However, people should recognize other aspects
despite optimistic advice.
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