The given diagrams illustrate the draft of the current university’s sports centre and how it will be renewed in the future.
Overall, there will be almost no change in the heart of the university’s sports centre, while the both edge of the sport centre is likely to be modernized by increasing a number of leisure complexs and shops.
In the present there is a 25m pool in the heart of the sports centre surrounded by a gym at the top (이것도 동서남북 이용해주시면 됩니다.), the changing room to the west and a place where people can seat to the east. Also at the botton of the centre there is a entrance and a reception right front of it. Lastly, there are two out door caourts at the both side of the sports centre.
Regarding the plans after redevelpment, only the gym is expected to expand its it’s size. The two out door (붙여주시면 됩니다.) courts are cleared to give away for leisure pool and a sports hall. Two more changing rooms are likely to be added to the south of the centre and sports shop and a cage will be set up respectively. Finally, the dance studio is expected to be constructed at the far east of the centre.
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2,3. 맞습니다 :)
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