Some people
believe that parents should devote more time to helping their children with
schoolwork. Others think that they should allocate more time to playing sports
with their kids.
Discuss
both views and give your opinion.
Spending time with parents is
important for children to bond with their parents. However, there are some
debates on the ways that parents spend time with their kids. While some people argue
that parents should devote more time to play sports with their children, I
think parents should allocate more time to helping their kids with schoolwork.
Admittedly, children can develop
physical strength and teamwork during playing sports with their parents. Also, the
experiences that they played sports with their parents remain as precious memories
with them. Most students get a great amount of pressures from studying. Having
some relaxing time with their parents can relieve some stress from their children
and make them more rely on their parents emotionally.
However, children need more helps
from parents on their schoolwork than time playing sports with their parents which
they can play with their friends and in school. Since there are many students
in a class in school, teaching can’t be personalized and getting help from
their peers also have limits. But with parents, they can learn on their own
pace and get full help what they need. Help with academic works is especially
crucial with subjects which a student is weak. For example, a child who isn’t
good at math is hard to follow the class because the teacher usually aimed the
level of the class to the middle-graded students and continued fails to
understand lessons can diminish student’s confident. However, with parent’s
personalized helps, children can get confidence as well as better academic achievement.
To sum
up, parents should devote more time on helping children with their assignments than
on playing sports since students need personalized helps which school can’t
offer.
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