주제 : The most important aspect of job is the amount of money a person earns. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
Many people have a different idea about job and money. Some people think that when someone decides which job is fits them the most, fitted for themselves the personal aptitude is most important thing to consider. But (문장을 and but so로 시작하는 것은 좋지 못합니다.) I strongly believe that money is the most important aspect.
To start with, job is not a purpose of life itself. To make a happy life, we work. So (여기도 마찬가지이고요.), if the job does not give enough money to make a living, we have to choose the another one other job no matter how we like the job. Of course, money is not the goal of our life as well. But we need some extent extend of money to make a family, to take care our children and to find something enjoyable for ourselves. Some statistics have shown that people who earn under 0.3 million won a yearly have has only 12 hours free time in average. In contrast, workers who earn a more than 0.3 million won have more than 40 hours of free time. this result demonstrates that it is deeply related how long people can do other things is money. This demonstrates that money is deeply related to how long people can do other things
On top of that, we can find our appetite more easily if we have enough cashflow. We can take educational classes so that to learn various skills. It can make a good opportunity to find a better job. In reality, poor people spend most of their time to worry about their financial problems.
To sum up, considering our inherent preferity is also important because working is the one of the main parts of our life . Nevertheless, it is undeniable that money is the most important aspect of a job.
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