The graph indicates the information about how Australians who live lives in five
different cities deal with drinking and purchasing the coffee and tea.
Overall, the percentage of people that visited visiting a cafe for coffee or tea in the last 4
weeks in Melbourne was the highest, while that (number라고 쓰면 틀리게 됩니다. 주의해주세요! 비율과 숫자는 달라요.) number of people in Sydney and
Hobart who bought fresh coffee and instant coffee in the last 4 weeks showed the
highest.
More specifically turning to the chart, around over 60% of people in
Melbourne have visited to a cafe for coffee or tea in one month while only just under 50% of
citizens in Adelaide made that visit did that visiting. In addition, the percentage of purchasing instant coffee in Adelaide has
quite a similar trend by reaching almost 50%, whereas the rate of fresh
coffee purchase only showed about at 35%. People in Hobart also enjoyed
visiting a cafe to have coffee or tea by recording just over 60%, however,
the number of fresh coffee and instant coffee were bought by people
with a rate of approximately 37% and 55% was recorded for people that bought fresh and instant coffee, respectively. Even though
the rate of buying fresh coffee in Brisbane and Adelaide were the lowest among
the five countries, their preference of instant coffee was were not that lower
than other cities, by reaching over 50% in both cities.
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총평: (7/7/6/6) 6.5
내용 분석은 잘 해주셨는데, 표현상으로는 많이 아쉬웠습니다. 사실 rainv님의 경우 이 task1의 '표현', 즉 어휘+문법만 잘 해결할 수 있으면 정말 더할 나위가 없을 것 같은데 말이죠. 시험 잘 치르고 오시고 좋은 소식 기대하겠습니다! 일단 뭐니뭐니해도 task2가 우선이에요!
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