Q ; Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view?
There has been a controversial issue over whether or not advertisement is harmful to people and our society. Although some people claim that more and more advertising is able to bring get a lot of advantages, others point out that there is already too much advertisement which is not good for people. In my opinion, I would firmly argue that our society rapidly would be rapidly ruined due to unethical and unacceptable methods of some commercials to our community.
To begin with, through an easy accessibility of advertisements, people are able to obtain efficient and straightforward ways to choose what they need. Conversely, it does mean there are possibilities which affect kids in a negative way as this advertisement. All of children have no abilities of controlling their will to buy products suitably. In addition, too many advertisements make them use money for impulse buy without any consideration.
For some reasons, there are other drawbacks on the methods of advertisement which are related to morality. These days, people are able to access various and creative advertisements everywhere with a cheaper price, but the cheapest price has no good quality of advertising in our society. Due to this circumstance, it is difficult to distinguish which is the best product in a huge amount of advertisements.
In short, both opponents and proponents have debated this disputable issue and both sides seem to have good reasons to support their arguments. Nevertheless, I am of the opinion that this vast quantity of advertisements would negatively affect be affect to our community and society due to a lack of morality and needs of regulation.
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